I made a video abot pag-asa :)

[illida]

ta da its mostly a crossover between my cat character icestar(the white cat with the brown muzzle and black underbelly) and pag-asa (I believe we know what she looks like XD) well here's a link to it on youtube www.youtube.com/watch?v=dSTdLlZx__k do you like it? and yeah i know pag-asa's colours change a bit in the vid but my paint program (ms paint) wouldn't let me open the other files to get her real colors

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[Avyface]

The drawings in this are nice. I really like that little heart break animation, where the two sides of the heart split apart. Well done.

However, I can't help but point out that I, as a viewer, have no idea what's going on here. x3 The music in this is all happy and fast paced, chaotic maybe, but otherwise does not match the dark, bloody, depressing visuals. More over, none of the visuals explain very much. They're all very abstract and symbolic, but we are never shown or introduced to what they are symbolic of exactly. Because of the fast pace of the sound, we are not really given a proper introduction to the characters- the images just go too fast. So I recommend putting in a few (maybe a sequence of three, simply due to the song's quick pace) images strictly for the sake of showing us the characters involved.

This is about lovers right? Well why not show us the characters you're talking about. Not just Icestar and Pag-asa, but also the characters that they are involved with. Take the time to establish that they had good things, before then showing us the heartbreak. If you go straight into the O GAWD WHRY, we as clueless viewers don't know what the heartbreak is about and therefore we can't relate.

But that's my only real serious critique. x3 You've got some really good scenes and symbolism going on here. They just need to be explained further with more pictures and stuff. Which I'm sure you'll get to since this is a WIP.

[illida]

thanks I always love critique, this song is kind of hard since it goes so fast XD I'm going to be redoing the beginning part (the part before the lip sync) to show like who the characters are and all that fun jazz to introduce silverpelt and pag-asa's dad thanks for the critique!